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Exes and Fires

boy, cigarette, hand, smoke, ∞

Exes and Fires

I looked at you through the dissipating smoke. Your eyes have turned gray with age but the hint of smile never left them. As nostalgia sat between us, I wondered in silence why we didn’t last. What went wrong?

I thought of the day we decided to call it quits. There was no shouting in the room, just a sigh. A deep breath that freed us from the shackles of a failing relationship. We knew it was coming. The end was long overdue.

Your mouth curved into a smile as you stubbed out the cigarette in an ashtray. You probably can read my mind. You always did. So I threw the question out and heard your answer that mirrored my own: “We were each other’s fire.”

Two flickering sparks
Colliding into a fire
On a moonlit night

Image Source: Favim


In response to dVerse’s Poetics: The End hosted by Paul Scribbles.

This evening I want you to think about ‘THE END.’ What does that phrase mean for you ? The end of life as we know it? The end of the road? The end of a relationship? The end of a job? The end of the poem? The end of the beginning? The beginning of the end? The possibilities are END-less 😉

Head over here to join the fun!

dverse

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  1. why we didn’t last. What went wrong?…this is what is usually being asked by everyone ending a relationship…you captuted that feeling in such a few words Maria..

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  2. I liked the observation, “We were each other’s fire.”

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  3. Love the almost sultry mood of this. Sad, accepting survival.

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  4. Each other’s fire…potential for a roaring success or inferno of destruction I guess…wonderful image to play with.

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  5. An excellent and imaginative haibun Maria. Will the flames carry on burning?

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  6. Freeing, sometimes that is how the end feels. I like the image of the cigarette being stubbed out.

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  7. “Each other’s fire” … a glorious combustion of flame, brief, followed by dying embers. Destined for ashes. Sad.

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  8. A really nice haibun. I loved the lines about being able to read each other’s thoughts even after a long time apart. The fire is stubbed out but some connection remains.

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  9. Interesting that a ‘sigh’ can epitomize an ending. Better a sigh, than angry feelings. Nicely written, Maria. ❤

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  10. i don’t know why our culture fears death so, ending relationships is so … naturally. We love, we cry, we sigh. And we don’t trouble much thinking about the ghosts of past loves. They just are. Fire and fire, of course!

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  11. My my my, Maria–SO GOOD!!

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  12. Beautifully written. I could easily see myself sitting nearby watching how this all played out. They know each other so well and calmly reached the same conclusion. Sad, but life is that way sometimes.

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  13. Oh that WERE gave that ending. Ugh. So so so vivid. Love the closing haiku a lot!

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