He stared through the dissipating smoke, fascinated how this woman evolved from a wilted rose to a flower in full bloom. She loves silence now —
though there’s never a quiet time when you’re with ghosts.
“What?” Ariella asks.
“What?” He echoes, smiling.
“That look,” she rolled her eyes. “You’re laughing at me.”
“Why? You asked for peace and we left you for three days,” he shrugs, teasing her with a poker face. “Admit it. You missed us.”
Ariella’s eyes widen but her mouth curved to a smile. “Pretend you don’t see me, Gustav.”
“You’re the one who’s pretending, my rose.”
Word Count: 100
Written for Friday Fictioneers, a weekly writing challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields where a photo is used as a prompt for a hundred-word piece of fiction. The photo prompt this week is a courtesy of Dale Rogerson.
Last week’s prompt, I was inspired by Ali and wrote a prequel to his story. This time, I’ve decided to continue being a literary parasite (if the word exist) and take inspiration from another writer. This one is inspired by J.A. Prentice’s flash fiction titled An End to Solitude. I’m normally a scardey cat when it comes to ghosts and not-like-ours but I love how he twisted his story and gave it a lighter angle. 🙂
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May 1, 2020 at 4:51 pm
There’s much more going on between these two than is on the surface
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May 2, 2020 at 12:26 am
I agree with Neil. Lots going on here that we don’t know. One of those stories that leaves a lot to the reader’s imagination 🙂
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May 2, 2020 at 2:15 am
I really enjoyed this, Maria!
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May 2, 2020 at 3:45 am
Very mysterious 🙂
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May 2, 2020 at 6:47 am
Nothing wrong with a little literary parasitism. 🙂 I love your story and I’m honored to know mine was the spark for it.
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May 2, 2020 at 8:10 am
Dear Maria,
At least she doesn’t have to be lonely. Imaginative and fun story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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May 2, 2020 at 8:23 am
I liked your use of body language in the story.
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May 2, 2020 at 9:07 am
That’s why I don’t read anybody else’s, except Rochelle’s, before I write mine. I want to pretend like mine is wholly original.
There’s a lot more going on here than your typical haunting. Does that count as necrophilia?
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May 2, 2020 at 2:17 pm
i suspect it’s getting to that point when she needs real people in her life. 🙂
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May 3, 2020 at 5:04 pm
awwww. There is so much in this. Loneliness and love and longing
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May 4, 2020 at 4:26 am
I wonder what really happens here… I’d like to see it as a ghost story, but sometimes life can be mysterious
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May 5, 2020 at 5:31 am
Pretending would be the safest route to take. Realization is for the living. Really cute story!
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May 8, 2020 at 1:19 pm
Nice blog
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May 11, 2020 at 11:26 pm
Aww…I didn’t even realize it was a ghost story. This was written well enough to be interpreted in different ways 🙂
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