Pandemonium: Realm of Desolation
Beneath her skin are fragile bones,
veins darken with the sorrow that flows
Slice her open and her innards
desiccate into dust
as fast as fear pierces her heart
So she crack a smile to hide
the realm of desolation
she keeps inside
© 2016 Maria. All Rights Reserved.
Photography by Anna O.
In response to dVerse’s Quadrille– 16: Opening to the Muse
Tending the bar today is Victoria with her delicate poem, Hibiscus. The challenge is to write a poem in exactly 44 words (excluding title) inspired by the word OPEN. I’ve written about Pandemonium last month for OLN and our current weather (thunderstorm) prompt me to write a follow-up. 🙂
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DoodleScribbles 
September 13, 2016 at 5:32 pm
oh geeez. oh geeeez dearie! I can still remember the hollowed feeling when i first read the first part of this. and now this. geez!! brilliantly sad!
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September 14, 2016 at 2:54 pm
Awwe! Thank you dearie. The weather’s kinda dark yesterday, hence the poem.
I hope you’re having a sunny day today. 😉
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September 14, 2016 at 3:44 pm
Oh it’s been raining here too!
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September 13, 2016 at 6:16 pm
Gosh that’s sad…
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September 14, 2016 at 2:57 pm
*sighs* Surely is.
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September 13, 2016 at 6:47 pm
So painful to read, and so much a skin can hide… I feel like it will just burst.
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September 14, 2016 at 3:01 pm
One of these days, the crack will open wide– baring all the sorrows and pain and fears and all the fragments of imperfection.And she hopes, someone would still choose to stay.
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September 13, 2016 at 8:35 pm
Opening is not always sweetness and light. This is a powerful piece.
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September 14, 2016 at 3:15 pm
Indeed. Thank you, Mary. 🙂
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September 13, 2016 at 8:44 pm
yet, there is always hope when you open to others.
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September 14, 2016 at 3:17 pm
Agreed. Although sometimes, opening yourself up could be a frightening move.
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September 13, 2016 at 9:25 pm
the smile is all the more sadder…
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September 14, 2016 at 3:18 pm
Aww.. my apologies, Sumana.
Sending happy smiles your way. 🙂
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September 13, 2016 at 10:02 pm
Your use of “cracks a smile” is perfect – makes it feel painful, like breaking off pieces of self.
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September 14, 2016 at 3:22 pm
Isn’t that tragic? How one smile could hide so much pain? *sigh*
Thank you, De.
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September 13, 2016 at 11:00 pm
Sad poem but oh so true! I love the use of “cracks a smile”. So much we keep inside.
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September 14, 2016 at 3:33 pm
Thank you, Toni! It is true for most of us. But a smile, despite the chaos inside, could also mean strength. Don’t you think?
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September 20, 2016 at 3:12 am
Yes I do.
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September 13, 2016 at 11:16 pm
Wonderful poem!
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September 14, 2016 at 3:33 pm
Thank you, PJ. 🙂
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September 13, 2016 at 11:20 pm
Brilliant and deliciously chilling! Strikes a deep chord. I love poems noir.
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September 14, 2016 at 3:35 pm
Ooh, deliciously chilling! Thanks, MW! 😀 I love noir too.
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September 14, 2016 at 2:36 am
Ooh very poignant. I still love that word, pandemonium!
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September 14, 2016 at 4:35 pm
Awwee.. you and me. Both! 🙂
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September 14, 2016 at 3:20 am
This is such a powerful metaphoric write, Maria. I could feel the pain of emptiness. Your creative muse took you on a ride, for sure.
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September 14, 2016 at 5:22 am
A very touching piece with multiple themes.
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September 14, 2016 at 7:22 am
Great piece about the darkness that lies within.
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September 14, 2016 at 2:20 pm
Wow! I love the darkness in this piece. Brilliant writing, Maria! ❤
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September 14, 2016 at 4:45 pm
I loved this poem Maria. We just never know, by looking at someone, the darkness and sorrow they may be carrying around inside them.
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September 14, 2016 at 6:16 pm
The emotions here are raw and palpable.. especially ‘veins darken with the sorrow that flows’ Oh!
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September 14, 2016 at 8:26 pm
A painful piece, but sometimes that pain can only be excised through opening. Great write!
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September 15, 2016 at 7:22 am
Very compelling imagery….and so much pain behind the smile.
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September 15, 2016 at 11:57 am
Faded Sunflowers lining
Open heArt
Surgery
failing
to BrinG
liGht back..
sure.. been to this
place too.. for a year
or so when young.. but
66 months later in the
middle of what life
in hell can be
as not
so well..
but surely
there is strength
in the smile so tired
of whining that’s all
that’s left to do..
to shield others
from the
Darkness
one lives in
side.. i was
determined never
to say another negative
word.. never complain and
eventually imagine and create
a way for liGht to travel back real..
so let it be written so let it now be
done.. when the starlit connection
of words and emotion finAlly SinG
in Unison
a SonG
oF liGht..
tHere is no
mistaking the
oTheR place for
those who pen it
experiencing dARk isREAL..:)
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September 15, 2016 at 10:58 pm
“Hiding behind a smile.” Something we can all relate to at some point in our lives. Tale of heartache in a brilliant composition!
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September 16, 2016 at 3:13 am
So she crack a smile to hide
the realm of desolation
she keeps inside
Too many of us do this!
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September 16, 2016 at 10:37 pm
Deep and powerful
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September 17, 2016 at 6:50 pm
Hmmm, makes one think,
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September 21, 2016 at 12:59 am
To me, this is a classic poem. Universal in reach. I love this poem.
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September 21, 2016 at 8:35 pm
Aweee thank you! Glad you enjoyed this one. 💕
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