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Scribblings and scrawls of a hopeless romantic soul

out of sight, i’m out of my mind

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the moon beams with your smile
and i weakened to my knees
like a madman, i hunt the streets
but the night hides you in vain
leaving memories on footpaths—
the aroma of coffee
the sweetness of ice cream
the taste of both on your lips

i love you
and there is no other way
not to

out of sight, i’m out of my mind

deny me
anything, everything
but not you

we got ourselves drunk in love
and left each other thirsty
these memories won’t suffice
but with them, I’ll survive
and until then I will cherish
the aroma of coffee
the sweetness of ice cream
the taste of both on your lips
MS


In response to dVerse’s Poetics: Twisted Adages hosted by Jilly who challenges us to  craft our poetry around an adage (or two) that you must change in some significant way.  And since I am missing someone today, here’s a shoutout to the good old adage, out of sight out of mind. This little piece beg to differ. 😉

Head over here to join the fun!

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8 thoughts on “out of sight, i’m out of my mind

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  1. love it…’out of sight, i’m out of my mind’…beautiful poem, well done.

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  2. We got ourselves drunk in love
    and left each other thirsty Awesome lines in a lovely poem.

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  3. Nice lines: “i love you
    and there is no other way
    not to”

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  4. I love how you used repetition and how the meaning had changed in a subtle way in the end.

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  5. Well, I’m out of my mind with how well your crafted this! Your words are ever wonderful!

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  6. Oh…loving what you did with this. An entire story in this one….and especially liked the coming back around to the “refrain” … and this line “out of sight, i’m out of my mind” . Well done!

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  7. Diana Tyler (Eccentric Muse)

    September 3, 2018 at 9:39 am

    I love it! Such a delightful read!

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  8. This is brilliant, Maria! I love the twist you gave to “out of side, out of mind”. I felt the passion and the grief in this poem.

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