Submission
I submit to your dominance
Like a foolish myrmidon
Jump in circle if you need—
This soul’s entangled to yours
My virtues are figments
Lost in the willowwacks
Your love enslaves me and
With a glint of utter fear
I tremble of being free
© 2017 Maria. All Rights Reserved.
Photo Credit: MKAphotography
In response to dVerse’s Quadrille: Fear hosted by Victoria C. Slotto and MindLoveMisery’s Menagerie’s Wordle #166 hosted by Yves.
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August 1, 2017 at 11:15 am
“My virtues are figment”–this is my fave stunning line, WOW!
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August 1, 2017 at 12:19 pm
Aww, thank you Jael! Glad you enjoyed this. 🙂
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August 1, 2017 at 2:33 pm
You Rock, Maria!!
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August 1, 2017 at 12:05 pm
Beautiful work!
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August 1, 2017 at 12:19 pm
Thank you, Victoria~ 🙂
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August 1, 2017 at 12:52 pm
Beautifully constructed wordwork.
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August 1, 2017 at 7:54 pm
Oh my…..a different view of love here. I think of love as freeing one to be themselves…the fear enters in here — a love that enslaves. Yes….for some it is this way and fear is very much a part of it.
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August 2, 2017 at 7:40 pm
Yes, don’t you think so? There are kinds of love that enslaves. The kind that some wouldn’t want to be set free from. Thank you, Lillian. 🙂
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August 1, 2017 at 8:42 pm
Great last line that illuminates the sentiment behind the poem. Very relatable as well!
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August 2, 2017 at 7:41 pm
Glad you enjoyed this one. Thank you. 🙂
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August 1, 2017 at 10:21 pm
Powerful pen here Maria and a scratch under the surface of love’s bright outer.
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August 2, 2017 at 7:41 pm
Ha! It is. 🙂 Thank you, Paul.
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August 1, 2017 at 11:08 pm
Oooohhhh, dear Maria, you are a wordsmith indeed!
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August 2, 2017 at 7:43 pm
Aww, thank you dear! 🙂 And I have to thank Mr. Grey for this one too. HAHA!
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August 2, 2017 at 11:05 pm
Oooh, Mr. Grey seems to be giving you inspiration a lot, my dear Maria! 😉
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August 1, 2017 at 11:21 pm
Fear of freedom seems to be a real fear if we don’t know what we would do with that freedom.
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August 2, 2017 at 7:45 pm
Yes, I also agree with you Frank. And also if we aren’t sure if it’s the kind of freedom we want.
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August 1, 2017 at 11:23 pm
Great work and poetry Maria. I have read it a few times now and it gets more powerful with each read.
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August 2, 2017 at 7:49 pm
Thank you, D! Although this one is still disconcerting to me and I still have not found my stand. Hmm…
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August 2, 2017 at 11:34 pm
I suppose Maria the reader gets the hit the first time and doesn’t experience the toil and hours the poet went through to get to the point of publishing. I don’t think a poem is ever finished but I enjoyed this.
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August 2, 2017 at 12:56 am
Ah, love that enslaves is not a good thing. Great write!
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August 2, 2017 at 7:50 pm
To most but to some… it might be a kind of slavery that sets them free. 🙂
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August 2, 2017 at 1:31 am
You have responded to the prompt so well. I felt a frisson of fear just reading it. Abuse.
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August 2, 2017 at 7:51 pm
Thank you, Victoria. I enjoyed the prompt very well.
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August 2, 2017 at 2:27 am
Are you acquainted with the Japanese practice of shibari? This poem put me in mind of that. Beautiful poem.
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August 2, 2017 at 9:26 pm
Beautiful and intense! A rather different take on the prompt but all too well fitting!
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August 3, 2017 at 1:51 am
Lovely aching piece.
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August 13, 2017 at 12:18 am
I. I. I… Thought of… You know who dearie..hehe
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August 14, 2017 at 1:38 am
You know I’ve always hated that word submit/submission. Maybe due to Christian Grey, although, besides that aspect I didn’t mind the books/movies.
However that besides the point, the reason I do not like the word b/c in many cases the person doing the submitting is seen as lesser, is not equal in Rights or privileges to another.
And I don’t think that works in life or even in books. Going back to Christian Grey, in the second book he lives Anna and realizes she can not be his ‘submissive’ (at the end of book 1) rather we see in the following books/movies she becomes more powerful and even when Christian lowers himself, Anna makes him rise up. When they b/co equals then their relationship is possible it works. Ana and Christian work b/c they both have equal power to hurt and harm e/o but also to love ,help, and care for each other.
I’m not sure if you’ve seen the books movies but for me this example suits your poem.
Your character loves this guy but true love does not consist of two halves or of submission as the understanding of the word by most is of being lesser. Rather, love is that two wholes become a couple. They are both one couple but both have their own lives, likes, dislikes. Even if someone is the more talkative or dominant or demanding person in the relatiobship, somewhere in their emotional and judicial bond, this equals out in healthy relationships.
Just my thoughts but well written Maria 🙂
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August 14, 2017 at 4:02 pm
Hello, Mandi! Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I appreciate it very much. 🙂 And yes, I have read the three books and watched the movies. This was my attempt to write from a different perspective. We all have our different takes when it comes to love, and this – one defining love as submission- is just one of them. I, for one, am not entirely into the idea of submission and domination in a relationship.
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August 14, 2017 at 11:58 pm
Haha, no I’m not either. I know you were trying to go from another perspective you did a great job as it had me perplexed. I just meant two equals are needed in a relationship not submission in allowing one partner to do as they please and expect the other person to obey always.for me it’s an old-fashioned view of marriage my Grandma and her mother etc. lived with. Sorry my example didn’t work well it had nothing to do with that whole S&M or even sex.. And, yes, I realize for the speaker, she is okay with this.
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August 14, 2017 at 1:39 am
*physical not judicial lol.
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