Rock Bottom
She stopped letting the world fill her in
And found comfort in solitude instead
No more do this and that; you can’t and you must
Just the resounding beat of her heart
Unfurling she finally realized
Where the world has ceased, she has begun
And this rock bottom that she was in
Turned into her very stepping stone
2017 Maria. All Rights Reserved.
Artwork by Elliana Esquivel
In response to dVerse’s Poetics: Poems that could save your life hosted by Kim.
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June 7, 2017 at 11:20 am
Turning rock bottom into stepping stone. That’s brilliant! 🙂
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June 7, 2017 at 6:34 pm
Thank you, Shweta~ 🙂
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June 7, 2017 at 10:06 pm
😊
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June 7, 2017 at 11:40 am
“Where the world has ceased, she has begun”
how powerful is that dearie! how powerful!!!! love every bit of this and that image too! woah!
(p.s. and i am dancing because you are active again! soooooo happy! ❤ ❤ <3)
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June 7, 2017 at 6:35 pm
Thank you, dearie! Happy to be back to join everyone as well. YAY! ❤❤❤
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June 9, 2017 at 2:57 pm
yayyy! 😀
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June 7, 2017 at 12:29 pm
Likewise Rose…happy to see you here again Maria.
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June 7, 2017 at 6:40 pm
Happy to be back reading and writing too. Thanks, Mich! ❤
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June 7, 2017 at 12:31 pm
Love that you found that stapling stone, though I find it sad that you have to reach the bottom first.
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June 7, 2017 at 6:42 pm
Thank you, Bjorn. Sometimes all we need is a fall in order to learn the climb. 🙂
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June 7, 2017 at 2:29 pm
Sometimes you have to hit rock bottom to reach the top again. But, my goodness, what a powerful piece!! Love this!
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June 7, 2017 at 6:57 pm
We have had days like that, did we? 🙂 Thank you, dear. Happy you liked this. ❤
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June 7, 2017 at 2:48 pm
How nice to know that the stepping stone is a Rock! Inspiring.
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June 7, 2017 at 6:58 pm
Thank you, Sumana. 🙂
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June 7, 2017 at 3:22 pm
I love title, poem and illustration! I agree – you shouldn’t let the world fill you in – it’s up to you to colour in yourself, with your own crayons, pencils, inks and paints. I love the idea of rock bottom turning you into your won stepping stone rather than someone else’s.
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June 7, 2017 at 7:02 pm
Thank you, Kim. Glad you liked it. We sure got a lot of healing today with your prompt. 🙂
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June 8, 2017 at 1:42 am
Let’s hope we all stay that way!
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June 7, 2017 at 3:23 pm
Sorry, arthritic fingers strike again – should read ‘own’!
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June 7, 2017 at 5:53 pm
Turning destiny upside down! I like this one!
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June 7, 2017 at 7:03 pm
Happy to hear that, Jane. Thank you. 🙂
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June 7, 2017 at 7:32 pm
🙂
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June 7, 2017 at 7:07 pm
The words and picture go together perfectly Maria. Glad to see the rocks turning into stepping stones.
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June 7, 2017 at 7:16 pm
Thanks, D. I fell in love with the illustration the moment I saw it. Thanks to the artist.
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June 7, 2017 at 7:16 pm
🙂
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June 7, 2017 at 8:51 pm
I love this poem! I’ll step on thin ice and suggest you didn’t need to make “she” bold. That word carries it’s own emphasis. There are other ways to bring that out. But the poem is beautiful as is.
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June 8, 2017 at 5:36 pm
Thanks for the insights, Charley. I was half-hearted with bold “she” too. 🙂 Will keep this in mind.
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June 8, 2017 at 10:37 pm
You have great words. Next poem, play with where you break a sentence. Try putting your breaks so the strongest words are at the end of a line (not necessarily the end of the sentence). It never hurts to play! 🙂
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June 9, 2017 at 8:46 am
Ah, line breaks. That is what I’ve been wanting to learn. Would it be too much to ask for your help? I wrote this yesterday, not the full poem. Did I hit the breaks right?
Your words
Were the soft breeze
That tickled my ears
They whispered
Sweet nothings
And I melted
At the hum of your love
Thank you, Charley. I really appreciate it. 😁
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June 9, 2017 at 11:05 am
They look good. You could also do it this way:
Your words were
the soft breeze that tickled
my ears. They whispered
sweet nothings, and I melted
at the hum of your love.
The way you have it is effective. It’s really a matter of personal preference. Just play. And maybe pick up a book of poems and make notes. Something by Mary Oliver, for example. You can reach me through the Contact Me if you have any questions or thoughts you’d like to share. Also talk to Jilly; she’s really good at this!
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June 7, 2017 at 10:24 pm
As the others, I liked how rock bottom is the stepping stone.
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June 8, 2017 at 5:37 pm
Thank you, Frank. 🙂
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June 8, 2017 at 12:42 am
This poem of yours is perfect!
The art and your words all come and blend well together and touch upon an emotion of feeling and the world within. 🙂
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June 8, 2017 at 5:39 pm
Thank you, Charlie. Your generous compliment that makes me smile. 🙂
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June 9, 2017 at 1:25 am
Smiles are a good medicine. You my friend are a talent and an intellectual. 🙂
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June 8, 2017 at 2:40 am
This is cool. I like …
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June 8, 2017 at 7:44 pm
Thank you. 😀
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June 8, 2017 at 11:19 am
I love the thought that rock bottom can be a stepping stone. Great write.
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June 8, 2017 at 11:59 am
Your illustration was a poem in itself. Refilling oneself. Beautiful!
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June 8, 2017 at 9:20 pm
Oh I wish you were sitting right here with me on my couch this morning….because you would have heard me sigh out loud and say “ohhhhhh wow!” after reading these lines
“And this rock bottom that she was in
Turned into her very stepping stone”
Incredibly powerful idea here! I think, really, you should somehow market these lines and this idea. So so powerful!!! And the illustration is perfect!
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June 8, 2017 at 11:07 pm
Excellent – am still learning this lesson! I like the imagery of rock and stone… perfect!
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June 9, 2017 at 11:36 pm
Love this
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June 11, 2017 at 12:25 am
Ohhh, Here You go again!! I love the way Your words flow! So descriptive and heartfelt but feeling so soft and tender, almost dreamy!! Makes me want to hear an audio embed of You even More! Please?
Loved the, Rock Bottom became the Stepping Stone. Love Stepping Stones! I hope You don’t get tired of us telling You how wonderful Your work is??? Just think of it like an, “I love You” to Your words?
Brilliantly Done!
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July 18, 2017 at 3:24 am
Oh I love that ending.
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