I didn’t fall into love, I walked in it. No. Walk doesn’t quite describe it. Is there a word for treading upon a rocky road with your soles hammering against the rough earth? As each foot advances over the other, another wound pierces its way onto your skin, leaving a scar that’ll last a lifetime. That what you once thought as a languid walk became a perilous one instead, is there a word for that? There must be.
Among love’s paths, I chose the one with an unforgiving darkness. Not a single light to guide my way—just a merciless void. I heedlessly marched towards you, despite being out of sight. For I know that every road leads to an end. For you, my love, are my beginning and my end. So I walked into love’s perilous path until I bumped into a hard surface with my face slamming into a solid wall.
I didn’t fall into love, I walked in it. No. Walk doesn’t quite describe it. Is there a word for trudging upon a lonely road after reaching a dead end with your aching soles, weary heart, and exhausted soul? Yet you chose to find your way out, tiptoeing from puddles of tears and sweat you once left on your way in. Your eyes, once blind, are now accustomed to darkness so you could pick the broken pieces along the road. Until, finally, you see the light. Is there a word for that? There must be.
Her broken pieces
An indiscernible mess—
Beautiful mosaic
© 2016 Maria. All Rights Reserved.
In response to dVerse’s Haibun Monday #13: Walking.
At last, I am able to join this year. Phew! I hope I’m not gate-crashing the poet’s pub? Thanks for hosting this, Bjorn. 😀
P.S. This one’s for one of my college best friends who is undergoing a “moving on” process (Yes dear, I’ve read your post rant). The photo above was from her HK trip.
May 10, 2016 at 11:35 pm
I love the voice you’ve invoked in this…the need for new words to describe this kind of journey, these scars. Wonderful.
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May 11, 2016 at 10:41 am
Don’t we all search for a word that would perfectly describe what we feel at times? Happy to hear that, De. Thank you! 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 12:02 am
What a great way to use a metaphor.. sometimes you walk right into it, you walk on ember, and one day you have to walk out of it…
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May 11, 2016 at 10:46 am
I couldn’t agree more. I believe it’s the courage to turn our backs from closed doors or solid walls that makes us stronger. Thanks for the thought-provoking prompt, Bjorn. 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 12:27 am
Some journeys are just perilous but we walk on still ~ Love this part:
For I know that every road leads to an end. For you, my love, are my beginning and my end.
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May 11, 2016 at 10:50 am
“Some journeys are just perilous but we walk on still…” ~ so true, Grace. I like that part, too. But it couldn’t be true for everyone, I guess. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 1:24 am
,,,walking into love…..I love the questioning here. The searching for the word. Sometimes words escape our minds and lodge in our hearts.
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May 11, 2016 at 10:56 am
” Sometimes words escape our minds and lodge in our hearts…” ~ I love this comment, Lillian. So poetic. 🙂 And I couldn’t agree more. Thanks you! 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 2:53 am
So much symbolism. And I like how you took the reader on a journey through your words.
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May 11, 2016 at 11:07 am
And I appreciate you taking this journey as well, Jade. Thank you! ^^
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May 11, 2016 at 3:41 am
I love the way you describe the walk of love and the pain of those aching soles, souls! Passionate take on the prompt.
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May 11, 2016 at 12:54 pm
Some walks are worth the pain while others are not, the tricky part is realizing which is which I guess. Thank you so much for the lovely words, Georgina. 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 4:37 am
The repetition in the narrative opening and closing is very effective and the word ‘mosaic’ pulls it all together wonderfully!
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May 11, 2016 at 11:13 am
Glad to hear that. Thanks for your lovely comment, Jilly. 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 4:51 am
Beautiful Maria. Finding beauty and love in the darkness. Choosing not the lighted path but the harder darker way. Fascinating and well written piece.
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May 11, 2016 at 11:21 am
And you deciphered the gist very well, Mandi. Thanks for the lovely words. Glad you enjoyed this. 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 6:01 am
This is wonderful, Maria!
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May 11, 2016 at 11:21 am
Thank you, PJ! 😀 😀 😀
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May 11, 2016 at 9:07 am
Thanks Sal, I’ll repost some of the lines on FB hahaha
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May 11, 2016 at 11:32 am
Haha! I haven’t checked your reply yet in FB. Laters, Fat! You owe me a chika. 😀
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May 11, 2016 at 11:41 am
hahaha sure I have a chika for you hehehe
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May 11, 2016 at 12:58 pm
Oh my.. Oh geez!!! Maria, Maria! This is one your best. Really. The repetition, the metaphors, the vivid description… *smiling*
Clap. Clap.Clap.
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May 11, 2016 at 3:47 pm
My hopeless romantic self was in a good mood last night. Bu I have to admit that although I wrote this for my friend, I somewhat wrote it for myself, too. Haha! Thankieees Rosema. ❤ ❤ ❤
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May 11, 2016 at 4:01 pm
HAHA! I actually knew that. HAHA. This one felt so raw, like straight-from-the-heart-raw. So I thought the ‘friend’ is somehow a figurative person for yourself. 🙂
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May 12, 2016 at 10:43 am
Hahaha!! I like that straight-from-the-heart-raw, it really is. BUT this one’s truly for my college friend (although I keep on reminding her that there’s nothing to move on from). Heehee
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May 12, 2016 at 1:20 pm
HAHA! Okay. I would believe you if you believe yourself. 😉 HAHA. It’s okay. Moving on is hard. I know that. HAHA
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May 11, 2016 at 2:11 pm
Such a beautiful, beautiful haibun! Stunning imagery, lovely use of anaphora, powerful emotion. These lines are lovely and moving:
“Your eyes, once blind, are now accustomed to darkness so you could pick the broken pieces along the road. Until, finally, you see the light. Is there a word for that? There must be.”
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May 12, 2016 at 11:18 am
Wow!! You honor me so much with those lovely words. Thank you, Vijaya! 😊😊😊 I, too, love that line. For anyone who have been on that dark path, the struggle must be tough. But with strong will coupled with luck, one could face darkness with ease. As long as they keep the faith.
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May 12, 2016 at 9:17 pm
You’re very welcome! 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 2:18 pm
And I’ve been thinking of joining dVerse for a few months now, so it’s nice to see this poem in the context of that group. April was so filled with non-stop poetry that I didn’t want to get into yet another thing. Now, I’ll probably join.
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May 12, 2016 at 11:22 am
True! With the A-Z and NaPoWriMo, most of us ran out of poetic juices, too. But I found dVerse a great community for poetry aficionado, the people are talented and warm so I gave it a go. It’d be great to see you in the Poet’s Pub one of these days, too! 😀 😀 😀
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May 12, 2016 at 9:17 pm
🙂 Thanks!
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May 11, 2016 at 4:17 pm
Lovely, it has been a pleasure reading this! Thanks for sharing 🙂
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May 12, 2016 at 10:43 am
Glad to hear that! Thank you, Lisa! Have a great day. 🙂
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May 11, 2016 at 7:46 pm
Magnificent writing as you search for just the right word!
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May 12, 2016 at 10:47 am
Thanks a lot for the lovely words, Carol! Happy you enjoyed it. 🙂
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May 12, 2016 at 10:01 pm
You are welcome!
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May 15, 2016 at 12:07 pm
A beautiful piece of writing! I love the way the third stanza echoes and extends the first.
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May 16, 2016 at 10:53 am
Thank you, Rosemary. I am glad you enjoyed this as much as I do. Have a great day.
P.S. I can’t seem to find your site, snakypoet.wordpress.com. Was your URL updated? I’d love to pay a visit at your blog as well. ^^
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