The last time, everything fit in three duffles. Four years ago, mom and dad left me here to perish—that’s what I thought then when your parents sent you to college in Belgium, a foreign country with foreign faces, foreign culture, and foreign language. Just me, my three duffel bags, and I in a jumbled mess.
I never would have thought I would come to miss this place. Its stinky corridors and noisy neighbors is a complete contrast to its neat façade but somehow I learned that it wasn’t so bad after all. My neighbors were fellow students from different countries and by the end of our fourth year, we’ve already become a one big, happy family. We laughed at each other’s flaws and cried for each other’s woes; one’s fight is everyone’s battle at the end of the day.
As I stopped before the cab that is taking me to the airport, I couldn’t help but take one last look and sigh. There’s so much memories and love in here. The last time, everything fit in my three duffles. I wonder if there’s a duffle bag huge enough to fit this place…
Word Count: 185
Written for Roger Shipp’s flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction For the Purposeful Practitioner. An opening sentence is provided and we are to craft a story to under 200 words length. This week’s prompt reminds me of my college days. I was sent to a boarding school, too- not to perish but to have the best experience of my life. 😀
This week’s prompt is: “The last time, everything fit in three duffles…”
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January 29, 2016 at 1:36 pm
Oh wow, Maria. I love, so love the vivid imagery that you have painted in your short story. The sadness and fear of studying abroad, and the sadness because you will miss the foreign land that has given you a lot of great memories. Great, great. 🙂
P.S. You do have a lot of Fiction challenges! 😀 And… I think I might join! 😀
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January 29, 2016 at 2:13 pm
Glad you liked it, Rosema. This really reminds me of my college days and the once strangers I met who now become my most treasured friends. 🙂
As of the moment, I’m joining four fiction challenges. This one, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers and Sunday Photo Fiction (which you are now part of), and Friday Fictioneers. What’s unique about this one is the predetermined opening sentence. It makes the challenges more challenging and fun. It would be extra fun if you join the rest of them, too. 😀 😀
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January 29, 2016 at 2:17 pm
Oh! Because you studied in Cebu, right? And your home is in Leyte? (Please correct me if I am wrong)
Hmmm! I am surely interested to join! 😀 But! I am afraid too! I am not confident if I can actually write fictions four times a week!
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January 29, 2016 at 6:32 pm
Nope, I studied in Leyte but in a different city. Still far from my hometown but at least not oceans away. 😀
Hmm.. just don’t rush it. If you think you could join these writing prompts na, you could always join. 🙂 I myself ran out of ideas sometimes. Hehe
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January 29, 2016 at 3:25 pm
Oh, I could feel the narrator’s fear in the beginning, her passion in the middle, and her longing at the end. You had them all displayed in less than 200 words! Bravo!
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January 29, 2016 at 7:11 pm
Thank you, Fun! 😀 Hmm.. if only she could fit that place in her duffel bag, she would. Then, there’ll be no longing. 🙂
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January 29, 2016 at 7:16 pm
If only she has a magic wand, she could turn it into a model…small enough for her duffel bag. 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 9:20 am
Haha! You always have that playful imagination, Fun. 😀 Yeah, if only… 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 9:54 am
😄😄😄
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January 29, 2016 at 10:47 pm
Excellent story….our fears and uneasy times can often times turn out to be a true blessing in our life, as this story depicts.
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January 30, 2016 at 9:21 am
Thanks, Jessie. Most of the times, they do turn out to be a true blessing in disguise. 😀
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January 29, 2016 at 11:01 pm
Wonderful read.. Brought back memories of my hostel days😀
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January 30, 2016 at 9:29 am
I’m glad this brought back wonderful memories to you, Shivangi. I’m guessing you’ve met wonderful people from there, too. 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 11:04 am
Yes, I did Maria and had a myriad experienced too which helped me in the big bad world outside😀
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January 30, 2016 at 11:35 am
That’s great to hear. 😀 Those people we met and experiences we had are truly blessings to us. 🙂
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January 29, 2016 at 11:12 pm
I wish you good pack up those special places into the bag and carry them around 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 9:31 am
That would be really great, Angie! But I guess we could always carry those special memories with us on its stead. 😀
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January 29, 2016 at 11:20 pm
This story is wonderful! It enccapulates 4 years in so few of words. I love the ending – “I wonder if there is a duffle bag huge enough to fit this place…” Wonderful story!
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January 30, 2016 at 9:34 am
That’s what I always wonder whenever I leave a memorable place. Wouldn’t it be nice to have a duffel bag huge enough to fit everything? (Like Dora the Explorer’s bag, perhaps?) Lol. Thanks, PJ! 😀
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January 30, 2016 at 9:36 am
LOL! I haven’t every watched Dora the Explorer. Haha! But, yes, it would be nice to be able to take special places with us in our bags. 😀
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January 30, 2016 at 10:03 am
Really?! I think you’re the first one I know who haven’t watched Dora yet? 😀 I guess in a magical world, those bags do exist. 🙂 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 10:27 am
That’s cute! I have seen pictures of her but never watched her.
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January 30, 2016 at 11:00 am
I remember watching it with my sister and cousins when we were little, it was actually kind of fun. 😀
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January 30, 2016 at 11:15 am
I grew up with Captain Kangaroo and Mr. Green Jeans. LOL!!
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January 30, 2016 at 11:37 am
Oh I haven’t watched those. It must be fun! 😀
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January 30, 2016 at 11:41 am
LOL! I loved watching them. They were on every morning before I went to school. He hasn’t been on tv for years. (I’m sure they have both passed away by now).
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January 30, 2016 at 12:00 am
Beautiful story, Maria! I love the progression from rejection to acceptance to missing it already 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 9:37 am
Glad you liked it, Sonya. We all have that moment where we are faced to walk the path of the unknown and end up enjoying whatever it has to offer. 😀
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January 30, 2016 at 2:53 am
‘I wonder if there’s a duffle bag huge enough to fit this place…’ I really like this ending line! Makes one really connect with the character and how she’s feeling! Very well written! 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 9:44 am
My favorite part, too! 😀 I’m really glad you enjoyed it. Thanks a lot. 🙂 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 3:47 am
I like this story. I can really feel the narrator’s emotional state as I read it.
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January 30, 2016 at 9:56 am
Glad you liked it. Thanks, JA! 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 4:06 am
Wonderful story. I like how something incredibly good came out of a strange new experience
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January 30, 2016 at 9:59 am
Most of the times, something incredibly good does come out of our new experiences. 😀 Thanks, Mandi!
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January 30, 2016 at 5:40 am
Leaving a place we love can feel like this. Wonderfully written!
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January 30, 2016 at 10:01 am
True. Your heart is filled with both sadness and happiness intertwined. Thanks for dropping by, Carol. 🙂 🙂
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January 30, 2016 at 8:31 pm
My pleasure!
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February 1, 2016 at 9:59 am
😀
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January 31, 2016 at 6:29 am
Nice story!
DJ
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January 31, 2016 at 3:24 pm
I like the idea of duffel bags full of memories and love, separate ones for different times in our lives 🙂
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February 1, 2016 at 10:17 am
We’re going to need more than three duffel bags for that then. 😀
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January 31, 2016 at 11:18 pm
Great story. I liked the way you handled the expanse of time.
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February 1, 2016 at 10:19 am
Thank you! It my own experience that makes it easier to write 😀
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February 2, 2016 at 8:11 pm
Lovely. 🙂 Leaving a place where you’ve made such happy memories can be very hard.
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February 3, 2016 at 11:17 am
True… but you still get to carry those memories with you. 🙂 Thanks, Louise!
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