My heart bleeds for the lost men
Who died on a crisp autumn air
Like leaves falling from their trees
Bared against the wind and cold
Unthinking that their end must dawn
Was their final look, a smile or a frown?
Valar Morghulis. Valar Dohaeris.
Of diverse culture and different races
Each deemed ahead of the other
Of varied belief and religion
Each believed to hold the perpetual truth
Lost in the void of eternal darkness
7.3 billion; the number persist to climb
Believing in our own seven heavens
Condemning each to our own seven hells
Valar Morghulis. Valar Dohaeris.
These religious-borne chauvinism and
Culture-biased prejudice and bigotry
Should not be the core of all our actions
For when spring comes after every autumn
And frozen rivers start to flow—
All men must die, all men must serve.
Valar Morghulis. Valar Dohaeris.
In response to Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie’s prompt and B&P Shadorma & Beyond hosted by Bastet.
Today we’re going to look into a fairly recently created poetic form called The Bop. It was created by poet Afaa Michael Weaver, an American poet (born in 1951, author of several collections of poems and a full length play) during a summer retreat of the African-American poetry organization Cave Canem.
It’s not totally dissimilar to a sonnet … it consists of three un-rhymed stanzas with a repeated refrain after each stanza.
The first stanza is dedicated to the statement of a problem and it is 6 lines long.
The second stanza is dedicated to the elaboration of the problem and it is 8 lines long.
The third stanza is dedicated to the possible solution of the problem and it is also 6 lines long.
And I’d like to add three words to be used inside the poem: lost – men – crisp.
November 16, 2015 at 5:25 pm
The theme is recent, relevant. Good choice.
And the construction, rhythm and word choice are equally great. In our today’s post we both use “my heart bleeds” or something like that. 🙂
Nice one, Maria. Heartfelt.
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November 16, 2015 at 5:44 pm
The news are again… devastating. *Sigh*
Thank you, Rosema. And I’m glad to share the same wavelength with you today. I’ve read your post, it was well done- as always.
I know with the world in chaos we cannot have a very good day but at the very least, let’s have a day. Smiles to you! 🙂
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November 17, 2015 at 9:36 am
That’s so true. I think bad news are more common now than good news. So let’s just live one day at a time and just be thankful that we’re still alive. 🙂
Your posts are equally great, Maria. Don’t forget that!
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November 16, 2015 at 6:55 pm
This has made me very sad 😦
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November 17, 2015 at 10:49 am
I share your sentiments, Aditi…
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November 17, 2015 at 2:18 am
Thanks you so much for writing this beautiful poem in this occasion. I admire your sentiments and especially enjoyed the lines:
“7.3 billion; the number persist to climb
Believing in our own seven heavens
Condemning each to our own seven hells”
a wonderful thoughtful poem …
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November 17, 2015 at 11:08 am
Thank you, Bastet. I’m glad you find it enjoyable to read. There is beauty, they said, in grief and gloom, though I would much rather choose to write about love and hope. I wish our world heals…
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November 17, 2015 at 2:42 pm
Yes … writing about love and hope is so much more enjoyable and in my opinion beautiful … but there’s a time for everything in this world … we can’t ignore grief I’m afraid.
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November 17, 2015 at 6:02 pm
I couldn’t agree more. A sad truth, it is.
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